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surreal cypress
A beautiful critique to capitalism, well drafted!!!
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faint knoll
I like it, but since you tagged it for harsh criticism I'll say that it could be structured better. The poem reads as a first person stream of consciousness narrative, and yk if that's what you're going for that's great and it works but personally I feel like less is more when it comes to creating an effect on the reader. For a first person narrative this could be more personal, I think the poem would have more impact if it used this to it's advantage. Apart from that, I really like your use of varied punctuation in your writing, it really keeps you engaged.
sand pewter
@rapid kite ughhhuuuhhh i cant get over how much i love your poetry like genuinely its a pleasure to read
i realllly love the concept of this one like a lot lot lot lot lot
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