This is a powerful work, and I think the prose form definitely lends to the experience and to the overarching themes. I do wonder if formatting it specifically to fit into a "box" (like formatting it to justify the text alignment) could also be of interest to you :))
#The box
candid wing
candid wing
I see, that's definitely fair! I tend to like thinking of form as a way to play around with space and visuals, but keeping it as it is maintains its authenticity. Now that I think about it, it's much better that way. But if ever you'd like to try something new, the form is one option :]]
Additionally I'd like to add how I find the existential touch, and a struggle for identity very compelling here. Amidst conformity, one has to fight for their own self---even to the point of fighting against that very self. While the persona is tough enough not to let that get to their head, there's still a stark ambiguity that persists. It's this constant battle to choose reality, and the true self.
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