visual wren
The imagery on this is good man. the head in the oven, spiders, lead sails were captivating. the tone is relly dark and introspective man wich i liked the most. the flow could ne better but that makes it hit hard more. rhymes is great also. this pkem is unique with it's metaphor and even the imagery. head on the oven is really evocative to me. for a 1st sonnet, not bad. could be better but this is not bad at all. great even. ending is poignant. and charred thoughts as imagery is a really good metaphor. overall. 8.6/10. keep it up man.