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#I can't write.
deep egret
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I can't sit down and write someone longer right now but I like this one. The teleporting while driving (a familiar route) stands out especially. The paradox of the poem existing. The struggle to express. The "us" in the first stanza is mysterious. The reader and writer? Or someone specific the author wants to communicate their feelings to but cannot? The words flow well, in a calm rhythm to me even though the words express urgency, which is a nice contrast