#I grieve not for her

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balmy ibex
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<@&1145760802666717234> I'd love some feedback on this if anyone has the time

eternal yew
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This was beautiful, absolutely gorgeously written. “The echoes of battles fought”, “scars she etched are a map I made”, and pretty much the whole last stanza😮‍💨😮‍💨

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Couple of nit picks on the tempo and flow on it which is very easily fixable with restructuring of the lines or adding some extra small word to some of them. But it’s a very small tiny nitpick on a beautiful piece

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Well done!!