#SEQUEL

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lament magnet
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This is a sequel to the birthday poem I wrote earlier this week.

Seventeen

Tomorrow, they’ll say I’m seventeen,
But it feels like a lie,
A weight pressed on my chest
That I didn’t ask for.

I don’t want candles,
Or a cake frosted with time.
I want scraped knees
And the soft hum of childhood dreams.

There’s a soul inside me,
Trapped and restless,
Pressing its hands
Against the walls of my growing years,
Begging to go back
To when the world was slower
And I didn’t have to know
What comes next.

Seventeen feels like a thief,
Stealing the quiet wonder
I didn’t know I’d miss
Until it was already gone.

outer kernel
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This is a wonderful poem, there is a good flow of story and rhythm of words. It's relatable and easy to understand but brings up complex feelings and you do so in a good way. It's simple and difficult all wrapped in one. Thank you for sharing