Repetition and Wordplay is fantastic for a first poem!
#Bliss of time
solid quarry
I really enjoy the flow
Thought, I think you could revise for grammatical depth and punctuate!
round onyxBOT
gritty fossil
For your first poem, this is a beautiful effort! You’ve created a heartfelt expression of longing and nostalgia, and the repetition of “bliss of time” ties the poem together nicely. Your imagery, like the comparison to red wine, adds depth and gives the poem a reflective tone.
To improve, consider tightening the rhythm and structure to create a smoother flow.