Sand Castles

[acoustic bear]

"Sandcastle"

the last time we met was the time we built sandcastles in the beach, the sound of birds chirping, and the sound of crashing waves, devouring our castle, still plays in my mind.
why can't I understand that it is far behind?
It's been years since I saw you again,
many boys I've known, yet YOU. Remain, a man, etched in my brain.
Our shared laughter makes me remind of how happy we were, until you ruined it all
remember the late nights, the starry and peaceful nights especially, when we used to call?

I still have your t shirt from the beach, it smells like
Sand Castles.

[acoustic bear]

thanks!! I have a hard time composing since I'm not really an English speaker! Thank you soo muccch

[unkempt perch]

this is nice! i can definitely tell you are just beginning, but for a beginner this is particularly nice! your use of imagery is very evident, and as a beginner, i think that's one of the things you should focus on the most. you can try playing around with line breaks and other literary devices to further enhance your penmanship. overall, this is a solid piece. i have a bias to sandcastles too so i love that touch :]]
@acoustic bear