latent flare
"Aaaah.
Hey, I see you.
The sunlight and the power.
Can you hear the ducks in the rivers?
The birds up there in the sky. Frogs sitting in the rivers. Thorns that bled you to death.
You only live once.
So here I sit with melodies.
Aaaah. I'm so scared.
Like how you frighten me. Of dark black monsters.
Aaha. I'm so scared of you as I am of myself. I'm scared, scared to be ready for death or the force of destruction. "
@coral hound
coral hound
Beautiful poem, beautiful theme and story. Beautiful atmosphere and tone. Beautiful everything.
Keep writing brother.
winged flume
very nice poem- what I got from it is the feeling (maybe this is a very personal interpretation) of when the sun is setting, and after an energetic day- now there is dread of the night;
minor improvements i might suggest:
[p.s. having the apostrophes at the beginning and end really gives a sort of "personal-resonation" type feel to the poem- and I really appreciate it.]