This poet has written dozens of poem to read(,) to his muse (who) doesn't exist.
#A poet with no muse
wide pewter
He just sits on a chair, next to an empty (why is chair repeated here?)(,) with unspoken words filled in
his heart waiting to (voice) out to a muse
Break the 'waiting' to the last line
wide pewter
Hm?
granite shaleBOT
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wide pewter
This poet has written dozens of poems
for a muse who doesn’t exist,
he just sits on a chair
next to an empty chair,
his heart filled with unspoken words,
waiting to be voiced to a muse.
Its better~ flows more @soft sphinx
autumn cedar
I will have to say, it feels really empty but still so strong. You can tell more the story of the unspoken words by saying why the poet feels like that, the past or the thoughts.
yeah
its really good and I totally get the meaning of it, still believe there is much more potential for your poem
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mexico
its nice to meet you too
autumn cedar
lol, you are right
cold helm
Nice lne
cold helm
You too check #1304754265310625822
It's okay man , but I liked your poem
It's pretty good
Keep writing
granite shaleBOT
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cold helm
That happens, just keep practicing you'll get better w time
wide pewter
I can see that your constantly trying to revise your poetry, which makes me quite contented! Your poem has now been elevated to be more flowy, and the imagery and objects are more obvious. Unlike your previous verse, your words are becoming more coherent. Nice job! This poem has a much greater potential to be something big. I'd suggest that you look through the possibilites of extending to review more about the "diary" motif. This is my suggestions as a reader! Thanks for updating me.