#Communication is Key

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wise storm
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I always said communication is key
But ironically I made it difficult to talk to me

I grew up with a father that screamed to get his point across
Guttural and bitter to force out his thoughts
Out of love he said, which left my perception blurred
Me and a mother who argued to have her opinions heard

We all adapt in different ways
Yet day by day the pattern was the same
Some sort of friction, always someone stoking the flame
To fit in I grew a voice like a match... lit, ready to burn it all away

Communication is key I’ve come to learn
Yet my voice became a fire, one that burned

Communication is key and I never learned how to communicate
I’m learning now, I just hope it's not too late.

chilly crystal
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Clever rhymes you have there! :o
And the poem is just filled with emotion, the 2nd stanza especially.
I don't have much to criticize here, perhaps just some advice on punctuation:
It can add more dramatic effect and emotion :>
Try adding punctuation at the end of lines in some places, maybe in the middle of lines as well, like commas, dashes, semicolons, etc.
Just some lines if you will :>
You may have enjambment

wise storm
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I didn't have a thought a punctuation in mind. Thank you, I appreciate the advice. I can see how it would help with the cadence and how someone would read it versus me.