very interesting. i love it. i can see the abstractness in subtle form. im not too good at juding poems but i like it
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fallen heart
kindred glade
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
keen void
I just got so lost in the poem in a good way, I didn’t want it to end, it felt like a fairytale being told I really love it, pleaae tag me in your future work
kindred glade
@keen void I will.
kindred glade
@covert bluff
covert bluff
This poem is a thought-provoking meditation on the human condition, delving into the duality of control & vulnerability. The paradox of seeking knowledge while being unable to fully retain or understand it. Your poem is rich in metaphorical language, likening the arm to a tree & a kite, which adds layers of meaning. The comparison of the hand to a burst nest of spiders particularly struck out to me cuz it’s vivid & evokes a strong visual. The phrase River of half-tamed fire is evocative, but its meaning is not immediately clear. Simplifying or clarifying this metaphor could make the poem virtually more accessible. Imagery in this piece shifts a lot sometimes it’s very abstract & sometimes it’s way too concrete. which can be disorienting. I understand this can be a stylistic choice, ensuring a smoother transition between these shifts might help maintain the reader’s engagement.
Hope this helps. 😊