#Inspired by Nabokov's Lolita

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languid lodge
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WAIT LAST SEGMENT GOES HARD

warped oyster
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last segment does INDEED go hard

warped oyster
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is the poem autobiographical?

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you don't gotta answer that if you don't want to, of course

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it's just a pretty taboo subject, and my curiosity is merely academic

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or was lolita such a life-changing novel that you had to put it to pen and paper

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(I didn't finish it, I never had the time, but damn that man was one hell of a writer)

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including the last line?

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that line hits in such a way that implies "I'm self aware enough to realize I'm going into this leap of faith blind"

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it's such a hard hitting meta line

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which is why I think you've had people comment on just how hard it goes

grave tundraBOT
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*which is why I think

you've had people comment on

just how hard it goes*

- doctorhunger
warped oyster
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don't take this the wrong way, but the poem DOES go very deep into the "spiralling into love" territory, and I can't tell if you wrote it that way out of genuine exhilaration for your real life actual feelings or if you intentionally designed it that way in a "meta" sense to evoke the feeling of "this girl is young and is running wildly into her fantasy, and she lacks the experience/maturity to take a step back"

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but whether it's option 1 or 2, it's pretty cool how you made it seem GENUINE

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as in, like, isn't writing SUPPOSED to do that?

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isn't good writing MEANT to evoke some emotion or feeling in the reader?

oblique hearth
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This is a wonderful poem!

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I also like many metaphors and comparisons you've got here

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Truly amazing, great job! 😄

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This is your first poem?

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It's truly wonderful 🙂

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You did a fantastic job

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You don't need to "compare" your poems with those of others

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You always have to be confident that you expressed yourself the way you wanted

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While still wanting to improve, and knowing there will always be things to improve

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Maybe not in that individual poem, but in general

grave tundraBOT
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*Maybe not in that

individual poem,

but in general*

- skugi.
oblique hearth
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That is how you feel good about the things you write 😄

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Fantastic job, again

oblique hearth
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May I show you a poem of mine? It's a dark one though

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If you're new to poetry, this may introduce you to the fact that even poetry has a wide, wide genre

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Which is really fascinating