#In the Weeds

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burnt heart
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In the weeds, I lost myself.
In the weeds, my heart stopped beating.
In the weeds, I lived with my smashed-up garden.
In the weeds, my light stopped shining.

In the weeds, I’ve been lost for ages; nowhere to go to, no one to run into.
Where have I been? Where has the old version of me hidden?
Have I finally crossed the line that’s unforgiven?
A pulse can’t be heard; has my inner child finally died?

I screamed from
The top of my lungs,
But no one heard
A single sound.

The loving color of red
I saw with everyone before
Was actually so scarlet,
It’s maroon.

I dedicated my life
To be friends with everyone,
But everyone dedicated their lives
To end me.

In the weeds, no one helped.
In the weeds, no one cared.
In the weeds is where I found you.
In the weeds, I found the cure.

Instead of calling me a curse,
You stopped
The wine-stained color circulating around my heart
That has been poisoning my entire life.

Under the pressure
Of a piercing spear through my body,
I was still given a chance
To pick up the dagger, and fend for my image.

Whenever I trap myself
Inside a dangerous slammer I created in my mind,
I know I’ll never be alone,
Nor will I ever turn into stone.

With oceans so deep,
With light so hard to reach.
Every day, struggling to catch a glimpse of air;
A rope comes from above, you made it fair.

In the weeds, I’ve been saved.
In the weeds, you chose to come and help.
In the weeds, a pulse can be heard.
In the weeds, because of you, my light shined once more.

empty turtle
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I like how it turned positive catCry3 I can't write happy poetry, so I admire those who can

simple cobalt
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The repetition of “in the weeds” really helps to ingrain the image in the readers mind. I really enjoy the subtext that can be gathered from this, given weeds grow where care is not shown, or the land has been forgotten about. The wordplay with the idea of the different shades of red is also a highlight for me, almost walking the reader through the all different interpretations of the colour, in as many shades.

A really nice piece! If this is reflective of your own experiences, I’m glad you’re on the up and up!

burnt heart
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Thanks! Your feedbacks helped a lot, especially since I always doubt my own works. I'll make sure to train a lot more.