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[pale dirge]

Gimme a while

[near temple]

Nice its good

I like it for a first peom its amazing... my first one was not this good 😭

[pale dirge]

Sorry, I took too long

I love the juxtaposition of the same thing, both in a different context. Its quite vibrant, vivid and the vocab is okay-ish. The theme I appreciate, quite unique honestly. “Foolishly hoping it wouldn’t reveal the same old scene” is such a good line

Very well done

Everyone has to start somewhere don’t they!

Would you like to read one of my works?