#toppled my soul
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The message is very clear, the flow and meter is good. The best line the first two.
Overall, a nice one. 7.2/10.
2 messages · Page 1 of 1 (latest)
Long days are nice,
In a way they remind us that it's ok.
Once I'm restless,
I'll get to feeling giddy,
A kid again,
Feeling of a child's giggling.
Innocent in the soul,
That's how I see your eyes,
Opened wide,
Reflect your soul vividly.
I can't help but smile,
So I'll smile awhile whilst in your view.
The message is very clear, the flow and meter is good. The best line the first two.
Overall, a nice one. 7.2/10.