#toppled my soul

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oblique ibex
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Long days are nice,
In a way they remind us that it's ok.

Once I'm restless,
I'll get to feeling giddy,
A kid again,
Feeling of a child's giggling.

Innocent in the soul,
That's how I see your eyes,
Opened wide,
Reflect your soul vividly.

I can't help but smile,
So I'll smile awhile whilst in your view.

obsidian urchin
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The message is very clear, the flow and meter is good. The best line the first two.

Overall, a nice one. 7.2/10.