#I would love some feedback on this poem

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fast mural
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One grain of sand,
an airborne flake pirouetting
for as long as it can.

Each second, each moment it tries to shelf
another passing instant,
inside its cinched hourglass.
See, that’s for us to take advantage of.

Gravity against each grain,
gravity against us.
Oh sand,
thank you so much.

lone flax
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Time is a gift from God indeed

fast mural
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Is there anything I can improve ? I suck at editing lmao

opaque baneBOT
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*Is there anything

I can improve ? I suck at

editing lmao*