It's very surface-level, and the rhythm makes it difficult to read. It has no space to make interpretations. I suggest leading the reader through witty comparisons, like "What are Heavy" by Christina Rossetti.
real anvil
It's very surface-level, and the rhythm makes it difficult to read. It has no space to make interpretations. I suggest leading the reader through witty comparisons, like "What are Heavy" by Christina Rossetti.