insanity of the world

[unkempt sentinel]

Humanity was like flower,
They are beautiful with colours,
Yet it was destined to die soon,
As if their beauty was just a lie.

Love was like seven seas,
Vast as if never ceased,
But soon enough this game we played,
Will bring some destruction in our way.

Emotions was nothing but a game,
Which we participated to strive better,
Yet the hell was no comparable,
To this torture we displayed.

Dying flowers was like humanity,
Filled with lies and hypocrisy,
Soon enough it will die,
So better prepare a final goodbye.

[oak bone]

there's really strong imagery here w/ "humanity was like flower" and "love was like seven seas" creating strong visual impressions.

u raise interesting questions about the nature of love, emotions, and humanity's fate.

the poem i think heavily emphasizes the fleeting nature of beauty and life, comparing humans to flowers destined to die. This evokes a sense of melancholy and raises questions about the meaning of existence.

constructive crticism:imo the poem makes generalizations about humanity and emotions, which can feel simplistic and lack nuance. Consider exploring different perspectives and experiences within humanity.

[unkempt sentinel]

Wow

Thank you so much

That's such an insane feedback

[oak bone]

im sorry i have my exam lit day after tomorrow

so couldnt go into more detail

rn

ahaha

[unkempt sentinel]

It's okay

I also have this final exam so we're both in it🗿