weak gate
so many different colours on a screen
they stare into my eyes, i stare back
what is the meaning they
tap tap tap
away, far. it comes back to me
two shadows leaping towards each-other
tap tap tap
they’re mine.
they always have been, i just never noticed it before
im running out of time
their design
is too intricate for these little round eyes of mine
tap tap tap
the sounds bounce away in my ear
theres nothing to fear
but the idea that you’re a real being.
nova wraith
Ohhhhh this one is awesome but, would you mind if i throw this here
So many different colours,
Oh my screen,
They stare into my eyes,I stare back,
What do they mean?
They, tap
Tap, tap
Away far
It comes back to me
To shadows leaping,
Towards each other
They tap
Tap, tap
You see? Putting spaces right, makes a whole lot of difference! The rhythm feels smooth even though I didn’t change a word!
Make sure rhymes hit at the end of line so readers know what they rhythm feels like!
weak gate
ohh that’s quite interesting! i’ll keep that in mind for my next one! :)