glass topaz
I was standing in my room
When the ground started quaking
Such a scary noise
The sound of the floor breaking
The dust and earth rising up into the air
People surrounding me were loudly screaming
As I just stayed and stared
At the rubble and rocks around me falling
I felt a fear so powerful
And I knew that day the trauma would be impactful
But I stayed as calm as I could
Now I am amongst the rubble
And we are all in trouble
For the earth is shaking more than it should
Wrong tense in the first line or if ‘stood’ then remove ‘was’
Tenses are one of those thing that can be only well executed in a style or fine right. It’s one of those things that you can’t really push poetry norms in the name of individual styles because sacrificing readability for individuality makes the poems devoid of meaning
Just smth if u want to use tenses for some effect of sorts
The last three line of the first stanza, I love, but the first line falls a bit bland compared to the three. I’d suggest changing that
Overall I like the poem, it’s composed nicely, I liked the segments of imagery shown and you have chosen ones appropriate to the poem as a whole. Good job.