spring sunrise

[warped gale]

In springs embrace, a bud unfolds,
Revealing petals like the stories told,
Watery dew on the grass, sprinkling with class,
Sunlight shinging through, shinging true,
In spring I can't wait for the sun to rise,
Spring sunrise entwined,
With my mind.

[placid fern]

hmm first of all, i like it! i think an exact rhyme with either 'mind' or 'entwined' or 'rise' would give it a more satisfying end, and maybe tapering the line lengths more instead of dropping it to three words as well. there's this website called rhymezone that you can find near and exact rhymes on.