#Lover's Lament

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normal yacht
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Alpha and Omega is his lover.
Her breath is creation.
From dirt, Her creates him.
From him, Her hands can create her.
Her love intertwines him and her.
There's one thing: understanding.
Don't seek it because it breeds sin.
What is love without understanding?
The more he tries to question Her,
The more he disobeyed her.
Curiosity eating his knowing.
They're both naked and bare.
Her ask her; her blames him.
him blames her.
Her love depletes;
Her removes them from love.
Now he has lost a lover but gained another.
The garden they built is burning.
Her cries; him outside with her.
his lover's love died.
his forced to walk hand in hand,
with another.
As his lover sings a lovely lullaby.

white oriole
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I really like the biblical imagery, but I highly recommend reading your source material before using its words.

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Good job.

sudden sandal
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Calling Adam and Eve "Alpha & Omega" is revolutionary, in the sense that you could've gone with a ballad describing the first two intelligent robots on the Earth.
Their connection and attempt to share the planet with greater beings - humans.

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Also incorporating biblical metaphors.