i like this a lot!!
#paralysis
dull oyster
good job
looking forward to more of your works :D
this poem is so simple yet so moving
wanton crest
Oh my thatk you so much
left vapor
Your poems are always good and very deep. I normally hate using my brain but your poems make me want to use it, the yearning for something, a connection or self acceptance, is something that hits home. A poem that effortlessly paints a vivid picture of what ur talking about. The metaphor of a wall is my fav part!
wanton crest
Ach youre so kind thank you so wech <33 little detail i think youd like is that in the “i see” part the first letters of each thing they see spell out “help” three times
left vapor
That's so deep that it went right over my head
This is exactly the parts I like about your poem
Love actually
wanton crest
Im so grateful 💕
For me its the little details
If you want i think i have stuff to point out in the fish one
left vapor
Go ahead
solid onyx
“A wall separating all for all”
And then there at the bottom you tie it back “there stands a wall seperating me from me, it’s died and rotting, I don’t know how else to be”
Epic!!⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Absolutely wonderful. The effect of it is like a closed circuit, creating a great current
And what’s funny is that you meander through most of the poem, throwing off several times, obsessively repeating yourself… it’s brooding. And I love it!!!
Like you got something brewing in that cauldron of yours
I love those moments
Best times for writing
Well done person , well done 👍 👍
wanton crest
Thank you so much!!!
I did the exact same circuit thing in my most recent piece
I love making it so that you get more out of a line in several ways, be it the “help” shtick here or the closed circuit approach, or lines that i only provide context to later
Its just so fun
To create and i hope to read