#Those Days

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runic dew
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Call to mind those days
When you relate to me
Hool your day?
How I harkened so solicitously
To your felicity and eudaimonia.
To ken your mirth;
Was ample for me to blithe.

Call to mind those days
When you were lightly offended?
Oh how I loved it.
Oh how amiable it was.
The more miffed you were,
The more endearing you got.

Call to mind those days
When you hied the limelight?
Oh how piquant you were.
Oh how gallant it was.
Thoughts of yore so dear to me,
That dwell in my soul.

Call to mind those days
When you plied my monitions?
Oh how acknowledged I esteme.
Oh how grateful I was.
For you to probe my abet was sufficing;
For me to reside in harmony.

Call to mind those days
When I was at my nadir
And you eased my mind?
Oh how soothing it was.
Oh how tranquil it felt.
To have someone nigh unto me,
I was at the meridian.

I can't seem to liberate
These fond memoirs,
These histories of the mind,
These reflective thoughts.
It throbs, but to renounce, hurts even more.

Oh how I wander why I had done that.
Oh how besotted was I.
Oh how agonizing you must have been.
Oh how nonsensical it was;
Yet it wasn't demure to incite pain.
A pain so enormous,
A pain so intense,
A monumental agony.
Perchance if I hadn't performeth aught so harsh,
I wonder how it'd have tampered.
Perhaps, a blissful denouement.

Oh how I long to reinvoke those whileas.
Oh how I long to relapse Those Days.

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@dusk walrus @sand breach @steady hawk @static tinsel Would like your thoughts on this!! Take your time coolshakespeare

dry holly
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so many words I had to look up, but it's a seriously well written poem

runic dew
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Thanks a lot

steady hawk
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will read soon!

ebon garnet
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I really enjoyed this piece. The refrain is poewrful and each stanza effectively uses the wide-ranging vocab. I would like to highlight the second to last stanza, where you describe the speaker's pain. I found this description particularly powerful and well-thought out, perhaps one of the most evocative pieces I've read for that specific emotion. Great writing.

runic dew
quaint forge
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I just have one comment so far: “Who is your audience?”
Still reading.

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I think this flows very well, and there’s a good rhythm building throughout the piece. The repetition is well-used, in my opinion. I think this could be far more accessible though. To a modern-day reader, they would initially read “Oh how I wander why I had done that” and believe “wander” to be a typo.

dusk walrus
dusk walrus
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It really pops emotionally, the threads there are pretty clear and functional

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I like it!

steady hawk
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And i like how it goes from like good and nostalgia to regret and longing its kinda bittersweet very emotional

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i enjoyed it very well written

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static tinsel
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I really like the repetition at the start of each stanza

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Some very unique wordplay in here too! There was only the one word that i didn’t know, which suprised me XD

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The contrast between nostalgia and regret in this is also really well done

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I enjoyed reading this 🫣❤️

runic dew
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grave creek
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yeah lots of fancy vocab

sand breach
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^feedback

runic dew
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I often research new words using thesaurus you know to improve my vocabulary so yeah there might be some grammatical errors and yes I make use of complex words to enhance that poetic effect

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"Oh how acknowledged I esteme." is basically me stating that I feel acknowledged and that acknowledgement to me is a matter of high regard. It's not pretty straightforward, rather abstract

runic dew
# sand breach

Thank you so much for sparing some time to look into this. I really appreciate your feedback !!

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And yeah I like to use big words when I converse too LOL

sand breach
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^ramble 2! : ) ❤️

runic dew
# sand breach

Haha thank you so much! Your feedbacks do help me a lot !! Yeah big words are really fun LMAO

runic dew
# sand breach

Yeah sometime in the future; we could! I'm doing fine and hope you're doing good too