Time ⌚

[sweet zodiac]

Humans ask me to slow down
How much longer shall I wait

They blame me for running fast
But I'm giving them a much as they need
They say the days has gone past
And they aren't wrong
They tell me to slow down
I ask them what they have done
In the time I have given them
Second, minutes, hours and weeks

Im giving them what they ask for
Yet they act like I'm a freak
They say I'm like gold but there's so much of me

They do things they want and blame me after all of it
I say I've given you months and all you did was learn to walk
I gave you years and after that
All you did was make another one
I gave you so much time
And only at the end, did you finally understand
You had so much time left
And you wasted all of that

[echo marten]

The personification of time itself is a bit of a cliché to be honest. I'd like to think time would be more apathetic to everything considering all it would have seen and been through. Yet it seems almost complaining about ungratefulness and is sad about it. I feel like you could've used some more powerful words or imagery to truly show the magnitude that is time passing and all that happens in peoples lives during their span.

Overall its a fun little piece which gets across its message and is very direct, but I can't help but to think if you were to take this as a base and do some revisions you could have a great poem on your hands.

[sweet zodiac]

that is a very nice idea i will try once im back home