I'm new to haiku poems and I need advice
on this:
Fiery desires burn,
Passion's flames rise higher still,
Lust's intoxication.
What do y'all think?
#help
rich summit
quartz brook
the best advice i got for haikus was to establish your message in the first two lines and then write the third line as something completely unconnected, either directly or thematically, to the other two lines. it’s gonna take you a few tries to get a line that “feels right”, but this can lead to some really, really baller work.
regarding the work you posted, i think it’s got some strong legs!! for me, coming from my methodology, i think it could benefit from this third line trick to accentuate the overall theme you’re going for. if it’s about lust, maybe replace the first line with the current third?
frigid talon
It doesn't see that you are new at all! This is one of the best I have seen, and I have my own book club!