A Swan with winter in its wings

[smoky pond]

all of my age,
illuminated
by the burn left at our hearth side.
I’m wrapped in your favorite quilt,
and there’s tea for you on the stove,
if, dear, you make it home tonight.
Your voice hasn’t pigeoned.
the birds have packed and flown south.
but i’m waiting with my bags
incase, love, you come around.

There’s a certain sorrow in an empty doorway,
that holds the memory
of you coming home happy.
I’ll wear my finest smile,
when i hear your key turn in the door,
but your eyes
are only ever looking through me.
You leave your boots at the door,
and my heart in their sole.
Where did all
the incandescence go?

You’re so tired of my pedantry.
catching your death
on the mess that you made me.
I take all the worry to bed.
Our wedding song plays in my head,
but you sigh as i reach
to hold your hand.
“not tonight,-“
“then when?”

…

Our sunroom windows
are veiled in a permafrost now.
Those perennial petals
perish on your vows,
and i’ve become a wick-less candle
to a frost weathered spouse.
your tungsten promise
is barbed by the wires of conviction.
Your lips pull from mine
like some silent eviction.
There was once an evergreen
with our initials in it.

(ending not done yet)

[unkempt bolt]

Some lines could benefit from further development or stronger imagery to enhance the emotional impact and provide a clearer understanding of your emotions.
The repetition of waiting for the beloved's return and the reference to the empty doorway effectively convey the longing and sorrow experienced by you. However, the poem could explore more specific details or moments to add depth and further engage the reader.
The lines about the sunroom windows veiled in permafrost and the perennial petals perishing on vows evoke a sense of coldness and decay. Further exploration of these images and their significance to the relationship could enhance the overall impact of the poem.
The reference to the wick-less candle and the frost-weathered spouse adds depth to the portrayal of a fading love. Expanding on this imagery and its metaphorical implications could provide greater clarity and emotional resonance.
But, The poem beautifully captures the bittersweet emotions of longing and love in a fading relationship. It effectively conveys a sense of nostalgia, yearning, and the complexities of human connection. The use of vivid imagery, such as the evergreen with initials and the sunroom windows veiled in permafrost, creates a strong visual impact and enhances the atmosphere of melancholy and loss. The repetition throughout the poem adds a lyrical quality and reinforces the themes of waiting, longing, and the yearning for connection. It creates a rhythmic flow that draws the reader into the emotional journey of yours. The inclusion of specific details, like the beloved's boots left at the door, adds a sense of intimacy and familiarity, further immersing the reader in your experience.
The portrayal of your dedication and willingness to wait, despite the pain and loneliness, reflects a deep and enduring love. It evokes empathy and admiration for the speaker's commitment and resilience.
Overall, your poem demonstrates a strong command of language, poignant imagery, and emotional depth.