Promises | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

viscid robin Jul 3, 2023, 6:58 AM

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They promised us grass so green
It would stain our clothing
And all blended with the hills

They promised us skies so blue
It would burn out our eyes
And all would be sepia

They promised us bright sunny days
That would bake us in heat
And turn our skin vermillion

They promised us a dream so real
We wished it wasn’t

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<@&1116088175618699345> any feedback appreciated

orchid girder Jul 3, 2023, 6:59 AM

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"We wished it wasn’t" scratched my brain it worked so well\

ripe pasture Jul 3, 2023, 6:59 AM

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Wow this is great! Something so overly idealized it becomes pure horror. An amazing idea to pursue in poetry

proud sun Jul 3, 2023, 7:01 AM

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Reminds me of kansas

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O where did the time go?

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