I think this poem is a little all over the place | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

tepid granite Jul 3, 2023, 2:35 AM

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I really like the idea behind this poem, but it just feels a little all over the place

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brave thistle Jul 3, 2023, 5:19 AM

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ok i like where ur goin with it but for sure all over and waaaaaay to long

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yes keep it long but consolidate on some of the things

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as it is now its a good recipe but drawn out too thin for us to take in all the flavor

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if any of that made sense lol

tepid granite Jul 3, 2023, 4:26 PM

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@brave thistle do you have any tips on how I could condense the ideas and reorder them?

brave thistle Jul 3, 2023, 4:28 PM

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yes id have reread it tho so gimme a sec then we could work through it if youd like

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