i think getting rid of the 'of her' would be nice but if you feel it helps portray your feelings then ofc keep it
frigid tiger
i think getting rid of the 'of her' would be nice but if you feel it helps portray your feelings then ofc keep it
other then that i love it, i love poems that seem more like a train of thought then a series of words, which is what you've done
blazing kelp
they got me with the "shes lovly" im dead
azure adder
It's amazing... FrFr