Afternoon’s sunset, I walk home with time
Before city lights shine at clock’s bell chime.
Courting the rise of creeping dark, I see
Dye of gold that hazes my eye.
Elevate me with that day’s end rhyme.
#need feedback with regards to my poem
long bear
This was also from daily prompt btw
night blade
My humble opinion. I think in the second line having both shine and chime rhyme with time makes the phrasing feel awkward to read. And this is just me being a pea brain but I had trouble interpreting the last two lines
lavish lance
Nice