#stars || poem 1

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safe whale
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i’ve just started getting back into poetry so this isn’t the best

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and there is absolutely no rhyme scheme

sly elm
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dont be so harsh on urself!!

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i think the idea and the analogy is really good

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some of the descriptions r a bit cliche and it seems more like ure telling the reader ur analogy tho

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don't TELL the reader, but SHOW

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e.g. u say what the stars represent or why they dim