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toxic ocean
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Minute as in miNUTE (small, tiny) not MINute(60 seconds) 🙂

forest abyss
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Your poem has a strong message about the inevitability of death and the importance of living a life that is worthy of redemption.

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You mention "morals, ethics, mercy" as qualities that are important for earning redemption. You could try to give concrete examples of how someone might demonstrate these qualities in their life.

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You can also try using more descriptive language to create a vivid picture in the reader's mind.