Need advice on poem.

[inner horizon]

I can't seem to make it flow nice. Idk what words to use or what else to add. Maybe you could please help?

[vital tusk]

I would adjust the structure to follow a consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme (ABAB). It helps make a smoother flow throughout the poem. Maby use more descriptive language and imagery to cause a stronger emotional connection and paint a more vivid picture.finally you could possibly rephrase some lines to maintain the rhythm and improve the overall flow of the poem.

[timber tree]

I feel like the last few ones could be replaced with
'and I think,
That I'm so lucky
That you chose to have the night talks WITH ME'

Chose or choose, your choice