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empty yacht Mar 27, 2023, 11:34 PM

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A contorted depiction of you stands before me,
charming eyes paired with a sincere, priceless smile.
i only perceive what my heart can discern.

But 184 days,
184 days left barren but not detached.
Yet you aren’t the type to count, or bring yourself to atonement.

Resembling an unsolved riddle,
ancient and perplexing - i am inextricable to you.
When i was incapable, it was your own raison d'être to fathom who i am,
to understand the light under my brown eyes.
Disentangle my ruminating mind.
It turns out, my brown eyes were red to you.
Some are impotent to see past a paltered puzzle.

empty yacht Mar 28, 2023, 1:37 PM

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inextricable. (pls comment)

crimson flare Mar 28, 2023, 2:19 PM

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hihi! after reading this i lowkey got chills man because i dont even know what d'être means
anyway! some things i want to address:

second stanza, instead of the first two lines, how about "But 184 days | left barren and attached"

honestly, my tiny brain cant think of any more comments. this is very well written to me! good job omg

#inextricable. (pls comment)