Frigid, like one being watched by a thousand eyes
Memories flood back as the cold shoots up
What was, what could’ve been, what should have been
They’re troubling and somber
But I’m cold no longer
As eerie as my environment may be
As much as I miss she
After each breeze
I feel more at ease
#Weather
pure shale
velvet fulcrum
I like your piece, especially the part ab a thousand eyes. As for critique, I think your use of rhyme could use a bit of work. The final six lines follow a AABBCC rhyme scheme, but first three don't. The poem would have better flow if you were consistent with your rhyming. Also, the line "As much as I miss she" sounds a bit awkward, as the correct pronoun in this instance would be "her." I get you were trying to rhyme it with "be," but good rhyme doesn't sound forced. Sacrificing grammar in order to rhyme often makes it sound forced