#Roasy my video

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next lintel
turbid grotto
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Heyyyy! I'm only 9 seconds in and your intro doesn't match the expectation right away from my point of view. Not sure how I feel about adding a story from the get go.

Maybe talk about the frustration to build even more curiosity like

"Ever seen a girl and got stuck trying to decide how to approach her?"

"Have you contemplated for a good 20 minutes before she decides to leave and your chances of meeting her completely disappear?"

"Well, I have this fool-proof guide that can take your flirting skills to the next level"

---- I'm just making it up on the spot and it might sound corny, but maybe that structure could help?

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Also I'm noticing that the title might be too long and the important part is the second section. The video could do better if you started with "The Best Way To Attract Girls..." Then maybe add "2024 Guide" or something like that

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I'd add a little more B-roll when you talk, makes the video more dynamic... I normally change the clip every 2-4 seconds (that's what I've noticed for other creators as well)

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Good luck!