#Roast my new video! (4mins)

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deft jay
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Hey everyone I've tried to cook (I'm really bad at it) and I would love to get roasted hard on this video so I can make it better
here's the link: https://f.io/hKbc5RlZ

fathom nacelle
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Things I liked:

  • Your pacing
  • Your use of music and sound effects and cropping etc. it kept me engaged in the video
  • That you set the 'stakes' in the video and then shared it with your sister.
  • Your energy! You seemed excited about what you were doing and I liked your way of presenting. Though the jokes didn't always hit with me because I'm not your target audience 😜

Things you might want to improve on:

  • The stakes of what you were doing could have come earlier in the video
  • Be more clear about why you are wearing a prison uniform and why you are making prison foods? I wasn't too sure about that.
  • The pacing with the second recipe wasn't as good as the first one. Naming the ingredients could have been faster
  • What was the goal of the video exactly? Was it to make food that your sister would like? Was it to make prison foods? I think if you have a clear goal of the video (why people would click and what are they expecting to see) that would make it more engaging because I would know why I am watching this video.