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timid folio
The breacher squad confuses me, you don't need it and it's worse than immortals.
The loadout on your delegatus is.... Sub optimal and putting him in a rhino is dangerous too. It's already easy to crack, and you incentivise killing it heavily by putting the warlord in it
somber sable
yeah i agree that the breachers are maybe not needed, but for the same points you could get a big tactical squad to jam an apothecary with since i don't believe the inductii can roll with one
you probably have line covered even without those breachers, so maybe i'd opt for a unit to handle anti tank of some kind. either a support squad of some variety, a dread, or a tank. maybe a lascannon deredeo could be a fun thing to splash in
timid folio
That's what I'd do with those points. You need killy stuff
timid folio
Consider stripping some upgrades off your team too. Some are superfluous.
Something like:
Delegatus, thunder hammer, cyber familiar
5x chosen with claws
Standard bearer with power fist
Land raider DT
Siege breaker, power fist, boarding shield
3x quad launchers, phosphex cannister shot
10 immortals, 2 melta, artificer armour, power fist
Land raider DT with search light
10 immortals, 2 melta, artificer armour, power fist
Land raider DT with search light
10 inductii, nuncio, vexilla, phosphex bomb, rhino.
That cuts the breachers and a bunch of upgrades. Leaves you with like 400 points to get toys
Don't run shatter shells on your rapiers if you're running phosphex. The extra shells cost a tonne and you probs won't use both to full effect in a game. Pick one
For 400 points you could run a couple cheap dreads, a hss team and other stuff, or even a full las Kratos 
somber sable
you also could upgrade the delegatus to a praetor just for more melee punch on that unit too, but yeah i think all those changes above + praetor + something killy to hit tanks and terminators sounds like a sweet list as long as you own the land raiders for it
lofty plume
Why are you putting a command squad in a rhino?
They're a melee unit, you want to charge
What is the siegebreaker supposed to do?
because if it's "give sunder to the 2 melta guns that the immortals have", then that's not good
timid folio
It's also giving the rapiers spicy shells
lofty plume
Overall thoughts: It feels like you're list is a bit too elite. You're spending a lot of points into models that you probably shouldn't invest into. 308 points into a unit of inductii looks insane to me, for example. 261 into breachers is a lot of points
Those are points you can spend into getting a dreadnought or a javelin, or hell, something that can take advantage of the siegebreaker's sunder ability
lofty plume
It's also giving the rapiers spicy shells
Ehhh not enough imo
They're just so expensive that I'm just unsure