I haven't written anything i usually don't I just think of a story in my head and think of the next chapter whenever I'm bored and need something to do. But this story has been in my head for a couple months and as of now I don't plan to turn it into anything i just want actual feedback if it's a silly stupid idea or something better. The story is about a loner (20s ish) who doesn't really care to life and prefers to die. The only positive thing about his life is his step sister who he doesn't care for that much. One night he gains this supernatural power of immortality (My explanation for how he gets it is kinda stupid so I'ma leave it out for now) Basically this power gives himself eternal life if he doesn't fear death, he can die but would come back to life and each time he does come back he gets stronger and more durable. Now heres the part that I think might be a little stupid, I planned that he would go to space and discover that Earth is a zoo planet and there is much more civilization upon the universe. He would meet this organization of aliens and find out there is a rising empire taking over galaxies and with his strength and durability, he could be a big help. (I was not thinking of star wars while thinking of this) Theres a lot of stuff to explain like how his powers work, how he got to space and such but i think you got the concept down. So be brutally honest because this is not a piece of work this is just for my boredom.
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It certainly sounds to me as if it could make a good story.
Go for it!