#Powers - Short Story

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mighty dragon
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Wow. Nice story. You seem to touch on a few good emotional points.

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The only comment I would have is that it's all tell and no show. You do include some dialogue near the end, but it would be good for the reader to experience the story as it happens, rather than being told about it.

round quiver
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Cool!

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I would send critique but It's better than anything I have written so I can't tell if/how it could be improved.