Hello, looking for feedback, not compliments! Thank you so much for your time. (:
#Feedback on Raw Studio Sample before I let this go public please!
stone swift
barren summit
Right now, it does what it needs to, but I think it can still be stronger. What jumps out at me more than anything is just how long it is, I understand the desire to be as clear as possible, but these don't need to be quite so specifically described. If this is something you're sending to clients, or expecting them to listen to on their own, that means your audience is experienced and doesn't need to be told that you're not speaking vs whispering vs shouting vs speaking at a normal volume. And if it matters to them what your specific gain placement is, they'll ask you.
Now, this is a personal thing, but I find that it's generally more engaging to have each of those be a piece of dialogue in context (meaning, lines that could plausibly appear in an actual scene), rather than just a 'sample text' sentence three times. I'd also move the ten seconds of room tone to the end, post claps. It gets the crucial info out of the way first. It might seem like semantics, but a long beginning vs a long ending leave very different impressions on a listener.
stone swift
Oh wow thanks so much for the feedback Ellis! I really appreciate the time and effort youre giving for the constructive criticism. Ill loop back to this when I have time to redo this! You're awesome for going indepth and provide such crucial information.