Here is my first attempt at a DIY commercial Demo. Feedback would be helpful!
#Commercial Demo Feedback
fallen epoch
deep geode
DUDE YOU SOUND LIKE A COMMERCIAL
this is really good!
but i feel like you're a bit too fast
tropic flicker
The Epson and Toyota spots are great. The pacing works well and it's articulate throughout, good energy, top marks. Commercials will frequently fit too many words in 30 seconds so I have no problem with gottagofast as long as it's articulate, which these were.
The Advil spot's sole flaw is that the volume tends to drop off at the end of words/phrases. "Acetaminophen" might be the best example of this. The first syllables are strong and then you almost lose the last ones.
fallen epoch
The Epson and Toyota spots are great. The pacing works well and it's articulate ...
My old seinheissers or my brain can't detect the dip in the phrases, would you say it's a deal breaker ( I already put it up on fivver).
fallen epoch
DUDE YOU SOUND LIKE A COMMERCIAL
:p thank you I'm just glad I didn't have to write them myself it's hard coming up with stuff that's not cheesy and is modern
deep geode
My old seinheissers or my brain can't detect the dip in the phrases, would you s...
definitely not!
fallen epoch
@deep geode thank you! Now I just have a couple more demos to make then.
tropic flicker
Definitely not, I just wanted to be constructive. Maybe I'm imagining things, lol