#Marine realizes her dream (6m21s, 88 lines)

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pulsar canyon
pulsar canyon
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yoro

worldly lion
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1:37 - fft change "speed" to "zoom" to kinda match the tone
2:29 - this line is a little bit long imo, maybe something shorter like "i can try to roughly form it into a game"
2:45 - fft "About the dream I always had." to keep it connected to the previous line
3:48 - "peak" -> "peek"
4:46 - "was" -> "were"
4:59 - "arent" -> "isn't"
5:27 - fft "I feel like I've finally given birth."

nice clip btw FeelsStrongMan

pulsar canyon
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thanks!