9IG

[half spindle]

Pretty decent

Described well enough to form an image in your mind

Word repetition takes away from the text imo

Like 'the earth' being used twice at the top

And 'picturesque' being used twice as well

In a short passage

Don't be afraid to use a simpler word if it explains what you want to describe better

[odd violet]

"A smile shows up, lights up the mood" grammar error right there, it should be "A smile shows up, lighting up the mood"