general crit ? unhappy ^^”

[dark fox]

hey everyone, looking for some crits. the first is the art, second is my usual style and the third is my reference ^^ i just really hate how this piece is looking so far, and i’m also very conflicted on how to render her hair and ears, or sketch her tattoos (would it even be visible ?) any crit would much appreciated

redline is totally okay, pls ping to respond !

[tight mica]

@dark fox from what i can tell here, her character proportions are slightly off? that may be what's making it look off. if possible, you should find a reference to see how bodies shift while on the ground (being pulled by gravity in that specific direction while being flat) as it would help a lot with proportions! with the hair and ears, i think you should just experiment with them in a way that may start out uncomfortable, but will be easier than just stressing about it.

[past idol]

I agree with the other user here- you have a lot of cool stylization but I notice that when it comes to chin placement, chest proportion, and how the shoulders attach to the torso, everything is just very minutely off

But nothing super duper noticeable! I would say you’re only noticing this because you’re being very nit picky (which is super good to do especially for improvement :D)

I would say maybe look at more references of female chest anatomy from different angles- because the skin/exposed areas look accurate, but when you get to the fabric portion of them under the shirt/where they’re supposed to be covered by a bra of some sort the anatomy goes a little skewy

Also shoulders should be one continuous thing- there’s a little drop down I notice, kind of like if you were making a 3D sculpted figure and you just stuck the arms on the side

But like I said, these are such minute details. You’re on the right track, these are just the few couple things I personally notice that might be part of your issue :)

[humble sky]

hii!! i agree too, i made a quick draw over on this reference i found on the internet, what helps me when i need to do these tricky positions is to always think in sections. Body parts will look bigger the closer they are to the camera. It is difficult to translate the proportions while you are also figuring out the perspective, so it always helps to do a test sketch of the character completely flat facing right ahead, no perspective.

[past idol]

Also one last thing while I’m thinking about it- I also notice that you do use pretty much one size brush throughout all of your art, like thin lines on the realistic portrait and the same sized mono line brush on the more cartoony stylized pieces- try mixing that up some :) you’d be surprised how easily you’re able to create more or less interest in certain parts of drawings with thicker or thinner lines!

[tawdry lynx]

general critique is the eye kind of pops off of the face a little bit, in this angle you would want it to wrap behind the bridge of the nose! theres always going to be a little distance between the side of the face and eye

[dark fox]

hi everyone !!! i’m working on these suggestions real quick and i will update ! thank you so much so far ! i’ll just be a few mins

[dark fox]

i still need to pull the left breast more to the left i think, but i tried to add some shadows and am going to start on the hair after this !

[dark fox]

i think i fixed the shoulder drop like u said ! i tried to make it a straight line but if this ain’t what u meant pls lmk !

[dark fox]

this was super helpful and i plan on making the lower body a bit smaller, but i did try to make the right breast a bit bigger ? i’m not sure if it’s noticeable yet !

[dark fox]

and !!! i really liked this, i tried using some smaller line art on some shirt details, but i’m gonna go back in during final details to add some variations !

[past idol]

I’d say move the left eye a little inwards now (or just warp it to be a little thinner maybe? And I think you’re definitely almost there :) those minuscule changes of the body also really helped already I can definitely tell :D

[dark fox]

also this was very helpful, i tried to add it but i’d love to see if u guys think it’s done correctly bc i’m not super confident !

[dark fox]

thank u so much !! u guys r. like really sweet and i really appreciate it 🙁🙁💓💓🫂🫂 do u mean like more towards the nose ? ^^

[past idol]

Would you be okay if I did a really shitty photoshop of what I mean?

[past idol]

So you could kinda see what im trying to to get at a little better :,)

[dark fox]

yeah ofc !!

[past idol]

Try flipping back and forth between those for a sec and I think you’ll see what I mean

The face makes a little crevice right there (your eye socket) and the eye should be sitting in that crevice :) (sorry I realized if the eyes were supposed to have a little bit of a tilt to them I got rid of that in my really shitty liquify job I apologize) but the concept is the same

And then I also slightly shifted the head towards the other shoulder

But yeah it’s just following those guidelines that although everyone has different shapes to fill them up, we all have the same basic guidelines

I hope with the visual it makes more sense 😭👍

[tawdry lynx]

looking much better! try defining the edge just a little bit more and youve got it

[tawdry lynx]

the eye that is furthest away on the angle has a slight bit of a turn down towards the bridge not that sharp but yeah its a little bit too high

[dark fox]

does this look like in the right direction ? i also made it a bit more defined like @tawdry lynx said ! but i might’ve not turned it down enough, im not sure

[tawdry lynx]

nope the tilt looks totally fine! for future references a technique i like to use is covering a feature or features with my fingers/hand to see one at a time when a piece doesnt look quite right to find where the problem lies!

[dark fox]

ahh yay !!! i’ll keep updating as i finish this piece up but thank u to everyone that has responded so far this has been super super helpful !

[past idol]

It’s looking awesome @dark fox !!!!

You made some awesome progress it looks amazing so far

PLEASE ping me when you’re all done with it, I’m too invested in this piece for me not to see the finished result

[tawdry lynx]

same!!

id love to see it complete

[tawdry lynx]

yes of course youve been so responsive and patient with our input and willing to learn you are a pleasure to work with! id be so happy to see the final and any other future pieces!

[humble sky]

it is very good!!

[dark fox]

@past idol @tawdry lynx @humble sky hi everyone ! i had soo many chores today but i did finally finish,, ^^” tbh i didn’t really like the original sketch which is probably why i’m still so picky with it, but i would’ve probably scrapped the whole thing if it wasn’t for you guys !!!! i want to say thank u so so so much everyone for the help, + u all def provided me motivation, i hope u guys like it enough !!

i’m def gonna go back to working on my usual style, but i’m still very happy i got it finished and got some new knowledge !!

[tawdry lynx]

ITS SO GORGEOUS

AHH DEFINITELY WORTH THE EFFORT

[humble sky]

i am so happy to be able to help!! you did awesomee

[past idol]

You did an awesome job!!!!!!

[past idol]

I love it!!!!! The colors are on point :)