#Made that thing before i sleep, would like some feedback

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graceful jungle
static flower
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what i see if I look at it from the recommendations:

  • the title is vague. at first, I thought "oh we're talking about the current state of video games in Linux" based on the title but it turns out to be 25-year old linux terminal games. that's not a bad idea, but could've been communicated better
  • the thumbnail has the Linux penguin in it saying "hey!", but it's really not doing much else. it doesn't exactly collaborate with the title to tell me "what is this video, what am I gonna expect, and why should I care".
  • they may notice: 2 minutes? can you really talk about it in that short amount of time? looks suspicious
    when I watch the video:
  • the entire video is slow. molasses slow. it's boring to watch the text slowly come in, and I can speed it up to 2x.
  • this is just text and no music. limited sound effects too other than the typewriter. you should definitely take advantage of the fact that this is a YouTube video - you can even keep the terminal aesthetic but please add some more visuals and audio to it. add background music, add a voiceover or something, get some static and animated pictures in it. there is nothing for me to hold my attention on and keep my company but the text :(
  • this intro still doesn't quite tell me that "we're focusing on old Linux games" so I will still surprised to see games from 1995
  • you don't quite get into depth than "oh this is what you do. this is how you play". I am not saying that you have to go into the whole history of computing and linux and the programmer's mother but I'd appreciate some more depth to it. maybe show yourself playing it as opposed to a small sized window, maybe have a few sentences on who made it and where it came from, and why it was made - sort of like a mini super-retro video game review, like LGN's or The 8-Bit Guy's.
  • there's like 2 games? I'm sure everyone would appreciate more than 2 old Linux games and I'm sure there's so much more than that

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static flower
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  • the outro is just nonexistent, it just suddenly comes and goes...

overall:

  • there is just a lack of energy, engagement with the actual games, and a lack of cohesion (lack of a proper intro and outro)
  • the title is somewhat misleading (do people still talk about 1995 Linux games? is this the experience we usually think about?)
  • the thumbnail is not related nor does it tell me what it's about, and the intro is also just as vague.
  • the idea, while incredibly interesting (to me atleast) is not given an adequate amount of research and thought and does not arouse as much interest than it could be.
  • there is a lack of real engagement to the games being shown other than telling what it is without telling me anything else about them (the creator, the when, the why, the how, the where)
  • the outro is less "this is what you should take away" and more "haha ok bye" - it doesn't wrap up the video it just tells a joke and runs away
  • it's just so slooooow and there's nothing else for me to look at and listen to but text. it just lets my mind wander thinking about other things (what lunch I'll be having, what I should watch next, when I should feed the kids in my basement) than thinking about the video that I'm watching