feedback on video

[subtle jetty]

I made a video about corsa horizon 5 best money method

Please go hard on the critique not too hard tho I just need to get some motivation to do better videos I feel like I’m slacking a bit
You can tell that I didn’t sound really engaging in the video so I need to talk more confidently and also another thing I already know is that I should have probably edited it more so it’s also a bit more interesting but other than that tell me what should I change and improve (I wrote this at 2 am so if I’m hard to understand sorry)

https://youtu.be/OxtTYhUTTf8

Not performing like usual but that might be because I usually upload around 11 pm but I uploaded this at around 11-12 am

[glacial rose]

1. The music feels a bit too loud/distracting, to the point that I've lost attention to what you were saying
2. You mentioned the way you talk, and you aren't wrong. If you want my tip: try recording in smaller paragraphs, and exaggerate your pauses (commas, periods) to either breathe or to read the next part in your head before reading it out loud (or both!), and cut the pauses in the editing phase.

[subtle jetty]

I did the second one on my other videos but I wanted go try something different on this one