finite plinth
This is my ELDEN RING DLC PREP VIDEO fighting a boss. I tried to tell a story about me killing him with jokes here and there but I am not sure if the video flows well and if it is enjoyable to watch start to finish.
I would love it if yall can give me tips on what I could improve from either a editing perspective or from a content perspective.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HB3R49rH6GM&t=16s&ab_channel=WoLBataa
deft notch
I laughed really hard when you said ... "Today, you're going to watch a man go through stages of BEING BROKEN" and the photos of you getting progressively more defeated with the boss 😂
That said, I think (as a viewer) it would be better to open the video with that joke instead of with the standard greeting / explanation you used.
**Make the audience laugh or be interested as quickly as possible, and then build upon that. **
If you save your first joke until 15 - 25 seconds, they may have already tuned out thinking the whole video was going to be narration or talking without humor.
As an aside, my experience with gaming audiences is that they want to see gameplay as soon as possible, which you don't get to until 47 seconds into the video.
That's just my immediate feedback. Good job on the video, and grats on the Mohg kill! He's a really tough boss! 🔥
finite plinth
Appreciate it a lot big dawg. :))